Sometimes I think about you

Hey writer bees!

What follows is a very short and novice attempt at Christy’s Golden Shovel challenge (see her post and rules here).

This piece is inspired by singer/songwriter Kacey Musgraves. Per GS rules, you’ll note that each of the words from the chosen lines of the song make up the last word of each phrase.

Keep it to yourself and If you think that you still love me are the lines from Keep it to yourself that have inspired the poem.

Remember that this is a work space and things can get messy and appear untidy. (Note: the phrasing format doesn’t show up correctly if you are viewing on a phone).

Gentle criticism is appreciated and helpful.  In fact, if you want to try your hand using the same words–feel free to do so in the comments!!

As always, thanks for reading and fluttering around with me. xo

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Sometimes I think about you

Do threadbare memories of me keep
you wandering? That door. I left it
propped open and accessible to
magic and possibilities until you closed it yourself.

 What if
time flip-flopped and fate settled you,
nestled you, next to me–do you think
our days would be better? That
life would be sweeter and you
could forget the pain? And just being still
could set the day’s sun. Where my arms encourage you to love
yourself. Maybe even me.

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9 thoughts on “Sometimes I think about you

  1. Awww this is perfect Michelle!
    I love the flowy feel of the words and phrasing. And the lines you chose from the song too, love em. Hadn’t heard that song yet–I like! She’s got a great voice.

    So what did you think? Was it easier or harder working with set boundaries/words?

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    • Awww…thanks! The phrasing is one of the hardest parts for me, so I just listen and put them in where it feels natural OR unnatural if I want more emphasis. I don’t know if it’s right, but I learn by reading yours and Jennie and Mary and Nicole and the classics.
      I liked having the boundaries. I’m OCD by nature, so this helped me more than hindered 🙂 That said, I’ve fiddled with this for over a week and the “story” turned out different from where it started.
      Glad you liked the song–she’s awesome. I posted another one here. It’s super twangy, but the words are HILARIOUS!

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    • Thank you, dear Victoria! You are always so kind and supportive.
      I’m actually very risk-averse (hello left brain!)…probably why I hide this stuff over here instead of over at the Mama pick page. It’s fun to branch out and experiment–even it it’s just for me.
      xo

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  2. So lovely…I really like how these lines kinda echo each other — “settled” and “set” and “nestled.” There is something very comforting and intuitive about their placement and selection.

    What if
    time flip-flopped and fate settled you,
    nestled you…And just being still
    could set the day’s sun.

    Poignant and lilting, Michelle. ❤

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    • Thank you, Meg!
      You have me all fluttery and thankful this morning. You just “get me” girly. I messed with this poem for several weeks and it wasn’t until I found nestled and settled that it started to flow. I’m still learning, but having a great time doing so. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I hope to get caught up on all of my reading today, too!

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      • I think I “get you” for two reasons: 1. You’re a great writer — and you turn human experience into gratitude, which a lot of people are going to understand (meaning, it’s not just me who gets you); 2. I do think we are kindred spirits. Yay to both!

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